First Chapter Critique

Your story only gets one chance to make a first impression.

Agents, editors, and readers decide in a few pages whether to keep reading—let’s make sure they do.

About the First Chapter Critique

Your first chapter has a big job to do. Whether you’re preparing to query agents or getting ready to self-publish, those opening pages need to hook your readers and hold on tight.

If a reader—or an agent—feels confused, disconnected, or underwhelmed in the first few pages, they’re likely to stop reading. But when your opening lands just right? It builds trust, sparks curiosity, and sets the tone for everything that follows.

This critique will help you refine your first 5,000 words so they grab attention, introduce your characters and world with clarity, and set up the kind of story your ideal reader is excited to dive into.

Whether you’re a debut author or putting finishing touches on your latest release, this is your chance to make a strong first impression with confidence.

Price: $205 (USD)

Format: Microsoft Word (.docx) with tracked comments.

Please export your file as a Word doc before sending. Don’t have Microsoft Word? No problem—you can use the free online version or download a trial to review the edits.

I do not edit in PDF, Scrivener, or other writing tools—please export your file as a .docx.

Sample edit: Because this critique is short and focused, I don’t offer a sample edit. But if you’d like to see an example of what the feedback looks like, feel free to get in touch.

Scope: up to 5,000 words—typically the first chapter or two, or slightly more if your chapters wrap just beyond that.

If your chapter is significantly longer, let me know and we can discuss options.

Genre fit: I specialize in fantasy, cozy mystery, and self-help nonfiction. Not sure if your book is a good fit? Just ask; I’m happy to take a look.

This Is For You If...

You want objective, professional feedback on whether your opening pages are working.
You’re not sure your first chapter is pulling its weight—hooking the reader, establishing stakes, and introducing your world.
You’re planning to query agents and want to make sure your opening stands out.
You’re self-publishing and want to ensure readers keep reading after the free preview.
You’ve revised your opening a few times but aren’t sure what’s still missing.
You write in fantasy, cozy mystery, or self-help and want feedback tailored to your genre’s reader expectations.
You want to make sure your opening pages match the tone and promise of the rest of your book.

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"I've been writing for years but have just finally started writing seriously. I was very nervous at the idea of a critique as I have a lot of doubts in my skillset as a writer, but knew it was something that I'd have to do eventually, and why not get it done early on so I can prevent myself from repeating mistakes?

They provided me both with in-line edits in my manuscript and a detailed report breaking down everything from plot to character development to pacing. Both were very constructive but also extremely supportive. I sat down for a long time re-reading the feedback and annotating it for myself, and now I have quite a bit of edits to make, but I feel like my story is going to be so much stronger now!"

Morgan Lawson, Fantasy author

The Process at a Glance

Here’s what to expect once you reach out to book your first chapter critique:

1. Booking
Have questions before committing? Don’t hesitate to reach out; I’m happy to help.
Once you’re ready to move forward, we’ll confirm your timeline, sign a simple contract, and secure your spot with a 50% deposit. (Need a different payment plan? Just ask!)

Please submit your manuscript as a Word document (.docx).

2. Critique Begins

I’ll read through your opening chapters (up to 5,000 words, ending at a natural stopping point, like the end of a chapter). If I need any clarification, I’ll get in touch before finalizing the feedback.

Then, I’ll do a developmental critique of those pages using in-line comments (Track Changes) to offer suggestions, pose questions, and highlight strengths. You’ll also receive a detailed editorial letter that breaks down what’s working, what isn’t, and how to revise for maximum impact.

Turnaround is typically 1–2 weeks, depending on my schedule.

3. Your Next Steps
You’ll review your edits, take what resonates, and start revising with clear direction.

My feedback is always honest, but supportive. My goal is to help you improve your story while building your confidence as a writer.

If questions come up, I’m just an email away. And I’ll check in with you post-delivery to see how things are going.

Ready to Take the Next Step?

Request your booking below—I’d love to hear about your story.

Not sure if this is the right fit? No pressure. Just send me a message, and I’ll help you figure out what kind of feedback or support will best move your book forward.

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What You'll Receive

You’ll get thoughtful, in-depth feedback and practical tools to help you strengthen your opening chapters and build momentum for the rest of your draft.

Your edited chapters

A developmental edit of up to 5,000 words (typically your first 2–3 chapters) with tracked changes and in-line comments explaining what’s working, what’s unclear, and what could be improved.

A 2–3 page editorial letter

Your editorial letter will include:

a breakdown of key strengths and opportunities for revision
an analysis of your story’s alignment with genre expectations
feedback on pacing, clarity, and structure
insights into character development and emotional resonance
observations on narrative voice and tone
actionable suggestions to help you hook readers from the start.

A clear action plan

A one-page checklist of next steps so you’ll know exactly what to tackle during your revisions.

Personalized guidance + tailored resources

You’ll receive constructive, encouraging feedback rooted in where you are in your writing journey, along with curated resources matched to your learning style so you can grow your skills as you revise.

Ongoing email support

Have questions as you dig into revisions? I’m just an email away and happy to clarify anything or talk it through.

Price & Dates

Price: $205 (USD)

Date: We’ll set your project start and delivery date together when you book. Once the critique begins, you can expect your feedback within 1–2 weeks, depending on the condition and complexity of your chapters.

Need a different timeline or have questions before booking? Just reach out, I’m happy to chat.

Ready to find out how your opening stacks up? Book your critique today and give your story the strongest possible start.

Let’s hook your readers from page one.

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What’s the difference between a line edit and a copyedit?

A line edit focuses on the style and flow of your writing—word choice, sentence rhythm, tone, pacing, and clarity. A copyedit looks at technical accuracy—spelling, grammar, punctuation, and consistency. My service combines both in a single, thorough pass.
Will you rewrite my story?

No. I’ll make suggestions to improve clarity and flow, but I won’t rewrite your voice or story. My goal is to enhance your style—not replace it. You always have full control over what edits you accept or reject.
What genres do you edit?

I specialize in fantasy, mystery, and self-help nonfiction. I tailor the edit to your genre, tone, and target audience.
Do I need to format my manuscript in a certain way?

A clean, readable format helps a lot. Double-spaced, 12pt font (like Times New Roman), with standard 1-inch margins is perfect. You’ll get detailed instructions once we start—no stress!
How long will the edit take?

Turnaround depends on the manuscript length and my current schedule, but typically ranges from 4–6 weeks. I’ll give you a clear timeframe before we begin.
What if I have questions during or after the edit?

You have unlimited email access to me throughout your revision process. I’m happy to explain comments, talk through tricky scenes, or just cheer you on.
What’s the second pass, and when should I send it?

After your revision is done, you can send your updated manuscript (up to 5,000 new or adjusted words) for a final look. I’ll do a global review to check flow, voice, and consistency. If you have more new/adjusted words, there might be a small additional fee for the extra work.
Do you offer a sample edit?

Yes! If you’d like to see how I work, you can request a short sample edit (usually around 1,000 words) before booking.